Comments on: F3: Breaking the Circle http://www.nostalgiaforinfinity.com/2009/02/f3-breaking-the-circle/ Missives on cultural detritus with a slurred punk-rock spin. Tue, 31 Jan 2012 14:52:16 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: Shaun CG http://www.nostalgiaforinfinity.com/2009/02/f3-breaking-the-circle/comment-page-1/#comment-3648 Shaun CG Fri, 06 Feb 2009 16:33:57 +0000 http://www.nostalgiaforinfinity.com/?p=517#comment-3648 I think you're both on to something - the interview wants breaking up to up the pace, and painting the setting would help with that. I'm glad you like the ending, actually, as that's the bit I thought was terribly sentimental. ;) I think you’re both on to something – the interview wants breaking up to up the pace, and painting the setting would help with that.

I’m glad you like the ending, actually, as that’s the bit I thought was terribly sentimental. ;)

]]> By: Rachel http://www.nostalgiaforinfinity.com/2009/02/f3-breaking-the-circle/comment-page-1/#comment-3647 Rachel Fri, 06 Feb 2009 16:26:17 +0000 http://www.nostalgiaforinfinity.com/?p=517#comment-3647 The ending is great, but I'm not sure about the beginning. It was a bit slow-moving I guess, I dunno - although it's not really long enough to be slow-moving is it? Heh. :) The ending is great, but I’m not sure about the beginning. It was a bit slow-moving I guess, I dunno – although it’s not really long enough to be slow-moving is it? Heh. :)

]]> By: Justin Pickard http://www.nostalgiaforinfinity.com/2009/02/f3-breaking-the-circle/comment-page-1/#comment-3646 Justin Pickard Fri, 06 Feb 2009 16:16:30 +0000 http://www.nostalgiaforinfinity.com/?p=517#comment-3646 Maybe you could leap in half-way through the interview, and pad out the rest with description? Either way, I *really* like the ending. Maybe you could leap in half-way through the interview, and pad out the rest with description? Either way, I *really* like the ending.

]]> By: Shaun CG http://www.nostalgiaforinfinity.com/2009/02/f3-breaking-the-circle/comment-page-1/#comment-3645 Shaun CG Fri, 06 Feb 2009 15:56:33 +0000 http://www.nostalgiaforinfinity.com/?p=517#comment-3645 ...so I don't really like this story myself because it manages to be simultaneously emotionally flat and sentimental. That's the main reason. It's also /very/ sparse on description and heavy on non-personal dialogue, which isn't so hot in flash fiction because it leaves the story feeling ungrounded. It's also almost all set-up, which, eh, you might object to or like. If you've got any other criticisms (or, contrarily, you liked this for some reason) please let me know. :) …so I don’t really like this story myself because it manages to be simultaneously emotionally flat and sentimental. That’s the main reason. It’s also /very/ sparse on description and heavy on non-personal dialogue, which isn’t so hot in flash fiction because it leaves the story feeling ungrounded. It’s also almost all set-up, which, eh, you might object to or like.

If you’ve got any other criticisms (or, contrarily, you liked this for some reason) please let me know. :)

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